"This kind of language undermines the credibility of the writer and makes it seem like a personal attack or a rant rather than a reasoned critique."
Ho chiesto a ChatGPT se non ci fossero errori ("linguistici" in senso lato) nel recente post del Trump a proposito dell'Università di Harvard. In fondo, mi chiede se desidero essere aiutato per scriverla meglio. Più precisamente mi domanda "Want me to take a stab at that?" Espressione idiomatica, ma volendo "stab" anche dire "arma appuntita, pugnale", sorge il sospetto che anche a ChatGPT stiano venendo pensieri strani.
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Questo ha scritto il Trump:
"Everyone knows that Harvard has “lost its way.” They hired, from New York (Bill D) and Chicago (Lori L), at ridiculously high salaries/fees, two of the WORST and MOST INCOMPETENT mayors in the history of our Country, to “teach” municipal management and government.
These two Radical Left fools left behind two cities that will take years to recover from their incompetence and evil. Harvard has been hiring almost all woke, Radical Left, idiots and “birdbrains” who are only capable of teaching FAILURE to students and so-called “future leaders.”
Look just to the recent past at their plagiarizing President, who so greatly embarrassed Harvard before the United States States Congress. When it got so bad that they just couldn’t take it anymore, they moved this grossly inept woman into another position, teaching, rather than firing her ON THE SPOT. Since then much else has been found out about her, but she remains in place.
Many others, like these Leftist dopes, are teaching at Harvard, and because of that, Harvard can no longer be considered even a decent place of learning, and should not be considered on any list of the World’s Great Universities or Colleges.
Harvard is a JOKE, teaches Hate and Stupidity, and should no longer receive Federal Funds. Thank you for your attention to this matter!"
Questo mi ha risposto il ChatGPT.
"Yes, there are several issues in the letter — both in terms of grammar and syntax, and also tone, clarity, and appropriateness (especially for formal or persuasive communication). Here's a breakdown of the main problems:
🔠 Grammar, Syntax, and Usage Issues
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Redundancy:
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“United States States Congress” → should be “United States Congress.”
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Inconsistent punctuation:
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“at ridiculously high salaries/fees” → the slash is informal; better to use “salaries and fees” or “salaries or fees.”
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Excessive quotation marks around certain words (e.g. “teach,” “future leaders,” “birdbrains”) can feel sarcastic or confusing. Quotation marks should be used more judiciously, especially in serious writing.
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Improper capitalization:
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“ON THE SPOT” → excessive capitalization is generally discouraged in formal writing. Use italics or bold if you want to emphasize something.
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“Radical Left,” “FAILURE,” “Hate,” “Stupidity” → capitalizing these for emphasis makes the text seem more like a rant than an argument. Use lowercase unless it's part of a proper noun or specific ideological term.
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Ambiguity and vague references:
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“Bill D” and “Lori L” are presumably meant to refer to Bill de Blasio and Lori Lightfoot, but the references are unclear and informal.
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“this grossly inept woman” – instead of vague pronouns and descriptors, more precise language would be clearer (though still should avoid ad hominem).
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🗣️ Style and Tone Concerns
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The letter is extremely emotive and inflammatory, using words like “idiots,” “birdbrains,” “evil,” “grossly inept,” “joke,” “hate,” “stupidity.” This kind of language undermines the credibility of the writer and makes it seem like a personal attack or a rant rather than a reasoned critique.
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The tone also lacks objectivity and evidence — it’s filled with insults, but doesn’t give concrete examples or data that would help support the claims.
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The phrase “Thank you for your attention to this matter!” comes off as disingenuous or sarcastic after such a strongly negative diatribe.
✅ In Summary:
Yes, there are multiple issues — syntactical, grammatical, and stylistic — that affect the letter’s clarity, professionalism, and overall impact. If you’d like, I can help rewrite it in a more effective and polished tone while preserving the core message or concerns. Want me to take a stab at that?
